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Many students choose to take a gap year before starting university, to travel or gain work experience. Do you think this is a good idea or a waste of time? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience Write at least 250 words.

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A lot of
students
 choose not to start
the
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university as soon as they finish high school
,
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 so that they can get away from studying and find out in what field they really would like to continue.
This
 could be a good idea for many
students
.
However
, the academic
gap
in
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between
,
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must
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 be taken into
further
 consideration. Many families believe that academic studies play an important role in their children’s future
career
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.
However
, I personally believe that it is more important to help
students
 to find out about their skills and the future career they are interested in, before starting university. In my point of view,
although
 the
time
 is valuable,
but
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taking a
gap
 year or two, would not be a waste of
time
,
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 if only the
students
 have already planned what skills they want to improve. I don’t personally agree with working, only to have an income if you gain no useful experience
at
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 the end. Upgrading working skills is indeed the most important thing in
this
 golden period of
time
. Some
students
also
 would like to take a
gap
 in between not
for working
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, but to spend their
time
on
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travelling. In my opinion,
although
 travelling is
also
 a kind of experience which will always be remembered,
but
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taking a whole year off, only to travel is not what I totally agree with. You can always spend
time
 travelling around the world if you have found your career and have a good income, but these valuable years won’t be back. As a conclusion, the choice of taking a
gap
 year
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 depends on the student’s life condition and their own plans for the future. But if one, is sure about continuing in academics,
then
 no
time
 should be wasted in between. To my mind, Planning for every second of these years is what matters the most.
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Consider using clearer and more concise language in your introduction to set the context of your essay effectively.
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Try to use more specific examples to support your arguments. Providing real-life examples or case studies can strengthen the points you are making.
coherence cohesion
Work on the logical flow between paragraphs. Ensure each paragraph transitions smoothly to the next to maintain the reader's understanding.
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Your essay addresses the prompt and explores multiple perspectives about taking a gap year, showing a balanced view.
coherence cohesion
Your conclusion provides a clear summary of the points discussed in the essay and reiterates your main argument.
coherence cohesion
The essay has distinct paragraphs with focused ideas, which is good for overall structure.

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