The first chart below shows how energy is used in average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emission which result from this energy use. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The first pie chart demonstrates the
energy
consumption in Australian households
, while
the second chart shows greenhouse gas
emissions
in households
in Australia.
Overall
, most of the energy
is used for heating, meanwhile, the minimum is needed for cooling. In addition
, gas
emissions
are produced mostly by water heating but cooling has the lowest effect.
Although
42% of the energy
in Australian households
is consumed for heating and 30% for water heating, the greenhouse effect is produced because of heating only by 15% and water heating by 32%. Also
, 15% of the energy
is used by other appliances, however
, they play a bigger role regarding gas
emissions
, particularly 28%.
In contrast
, refrigeration, lighting and cooling take a low place in both charts being equal to 7%, 4% and 2% of the energy
spent in households
and 14%, 8% and 3% respectively in gas
emissions
respectively. Furthermore
, it is obvious that cooling has a minimal role in the household's both
Correct pronoun usage
apply
energy
usage and gas
emission.Submitted by i.nureddinn on
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, households, gas, emissions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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