The first chart below shows how energy is used in average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emission which result from this energy use. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The first chart below shows how energy is used in average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emission which result from this energy use.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The first pie chart demonstrates the
energy
consumption in Australian
households
,
while
the second chart shows greenhouse
gas
emissions
in
households
in Australia.
Overall
, most of the
energy
is used for heating, meanwhile, the minimum is needed for cooling.
In addition
,
gas
emissions
are produced mostly by water heating but cooling has the lowest effect.
Although
42% of the
energy
in Australian
households
is consumed for heating and 30% for water heating, the greenhouse effect is produced because of heating only by 15% and water heating by 32%.
Also
, 15% of the
energy
is used by other appliances,
however
, they play a bigger role regarding
gas
emissions
, particularly 28%.
In contrast
, refrigeration, lighting and cooling take a low place in both charts being equal to 7%, 4% and 2% of the
energy
spent in
households
and 14%, 8% and 3% respectively in
gas
emissions
respectively.
Furthermore
, it is obvious that cooling has a minimal role in the household's
both
Correct pronoun usage
apply
show examples
energy
usage and
gas
emission.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, households, gas, emissions with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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