You and your family are living in rented accommodation in an English speaking country. You are not satisfied with the condition of some of the furniture. Write a letter to your landlord. In your letter
Dear Gim,
I hope
this
message finds you well. In this
letter
I will describe Add a comma
letter,
the
dissatisfaction Change the word
my
from
the furniture items.
We have been moved Change preposition
with
in
Change preposition
into
this
apartment just two months ago. Before moving we were told that apartment
Correct article usage
the apartment
is newly build
with all new furniture but Change the verb form
is newly built
unfortunately
some of Add a comma
unfortunately,
items
Add an article
the items
are
very old. We didn't get time to see the apartment before we Wrong verb form
were
move
. Wrong verb form
moved
This
country is new for me and my family. We searched alot
online to find Correct your spelling
a lot
good
place to live, there is no doubt that Add an article
a good
place
is clean and beautiful. But, we are facing only Correct article usage
the place
few
difficulties.
The sofa set which is in Change the article
a few
living
room, its condition is very bad. It looks likeAdd an article
the living
5
or 7 year old. We find Correct article usage
a 5
difficult
to sit on that sofa because it is not comfortable.And Correct pronoun usage
it difficult
other
problem is Change the wording
another
dining
table, there are so many cracks on Add an article
a dining
the dining
table
we are afraid to put Add an article
the table
any thing
on Correct your spelling
anything
table
. So, it is my request to look Add an article
the table
on
Change preposition
at
this
things as soon as possible.
Hope to hear soon
Yours faithfully,
SimCorrect determiner usage
these
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General
Ensure to proofread your letter to correct grammatical errors and punctuation issues. This will enhance clarity and professionalism.
Task Achievement
Mentioning more specific details, such as exact descriptions of the faults and potential impacts on daily living, can bolster your argument.
Coherence and Cohesion
Use conjunctions effectively to improve the flow of sentences and paragraphs, which will enhance overall coherence and cohesion.
Greeting and Closing
The letter starts with a polite greeting and maintains a formal tone throughout, which is appropriate for the context.
Single Idea per Paragraph
Each paragraph addresses a single idea, making the letter organized and easy to follow.
Complete Response
The intention of the letter is clear, and it adequately addresses the main issue of dissatisfaction with the furniture.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite