You and your family are living in rented accommodation in an English speaking country. You are not satisfied with the condition of some of the furniture. Write a letter to your landlord. In your letter

Dear Gim, I hope
this
message finds you well. In
this
letter
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letter,
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I will describe
the
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my
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dissatisfaction
from
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with
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the furniture items. We have been moved
in
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into
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this
apartment just two months ago. Before moving we were told that
apartment
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the apartment
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is newly build
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with all new furniture but
unfortunately
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unfortunately,
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some of
items
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the items
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are
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were
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very old. We didn't get time to see the apartment before we
move
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moved
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.
This
country is new for me and my family. We searched
alot
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a lot
online to find
good
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a good
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place to live, there is no doubt that
place
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the place
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is clean and beautiful. But, we are facing only
few
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a few
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difficulties. The sofa set which is in
living
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the living
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room, its condition is very bad. It looks like
5
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a 5
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or 7 year old. We find
difficult
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it difficult
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to sit on that sofa because it is not comfortable.And
other
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another
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problem is
dining
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a dining
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table, there are so many cracks on
table
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the table
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we are afraid to put
any thing
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anything
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on
table
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the table
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. So, it is my request to look
on
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at
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this
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these
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things as soon as possible. Hope to hear soon Yours faithfully, Sim
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General
Ensure to proofread your letter to correct grammatical errors and punctuation issues. This will enhance clarity and professionalism.
Task Achievement
Mentioning more specific details, such as exact descriptions of the faults and potential impacts on daily living, can bolster your argument.
Coherence and Cohesion
Use conjunctions effectively to improve the flow of sentences and paragraphs, which will enhance overall coherence and cohesion.
Greeting and Closing
The letter starts with a polite greeting and maintains a formal tone throughout, which is appropriate for the context.
Single Idea per Paragraph
Each paragraph addresses a single idea, making the letter organized and easy to follow.
Complete Response
The intention of the letter is clear, and it adequately addresses the main issue of dissatisfaction with the furniture.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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