The chart below shows the percentage of households owning four types of electronic devices between 1995 and 2015. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. (line graph)
The line chart depicts the rate of
household
obtaining different types of electronic equipment from 1995 and 2015 . It is clear from the graph that the percentage of Fix the agreement mistake
households
household
with computer devices continuously dominated compared with other devices . Fix the agreement mistake
households
According to
what is shown the equivalent figure of MP3 player
ranked the lowest rate during the period shown . Fix the agreement mistake
players
Beside
the mobile phone saw a clear upward trend from 10 to 70 between 1995 to 2000 .The quantity number of mobile Change preposition
Besides
phone
increased remarkably peaking at 98% approximately. Fix the agreement mistake
phones
However
the computer was around 9% in 1995 which jumped to 98% by 2015 . Add a comma
However,
On the other hand
, the amount of MO3 reached below 18% in 1995 then
in the following years remained stable with Correct word choice
and then
figure
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a figure
about
49% .Change preposition
of about
While the
table showed Correct word choice
The
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a sharply
sharply increased
from 20% to 60% between 2005 to 2010 and grew to 80% in 2015.Replace the word
sharp increase
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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