The chart and table below give information about tourists at a particular holiday resort in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The table and pie chart compare travellers,who came from 4 parts of the Earth, mainly Asia,Europe,
US
and Others to Australia.
Correct article usage
the US
Overall
,it is clear that
big
Correct article usage
a big
percent
of Replace the word
percentage
tourists
were from Europe. Moreover
,Europeans spent more time than others in this
country. The interesting fact is that,
Asian and American Remove the comma
apply
tourists
had similar interests.
Although
the highest percentage of people
were from Europe, 37%,the least
percentage of travellers were from Other places,10%. 35% of travellers came from America. Correct word choice
lowest
While
18% of comers were asians
.
Change the capitalization
Asians
Tourists
from other regions stayed about
10 Change preposition
for about
days
in Australia. However
, Europeans stayed 6 days
more than them. Asians' average length of stay was 7 days
. But american
Change the capitalization
American
people
stay 14 days
in this
country.If most
popular place for Add an article
the most
tourists
from Asia was 5-star
hotel,Add an article
a 5-star
americans
chose Change the capitalization
Americans
4-star
Add an article
the 4-star
a 4-star
hotel
. Fix the agreement mistake
hotels
Additionally
,Europeans and people
who came from other countries stayed in camping or caravans. Furthermore
sightseeing was interesting Add a comma
Furthermore,
by
Change preposition
for
people
from Asia and the USA. Most of the tourists
from the EU were keen on swimming and sunbathing. People
from other places were interested in surfing.Submitted by makemoneyizzy16 on
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tourists, people, days with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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