The chart and table below give information about tourists at a particular holiday resort in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart and table below give information about tourists at a particular holiday resort in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The table and pie chart compare travellers,who came from 4 parts of the Earth, mainly Asia,Europe,
US
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the US
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and Others to Australia.
Overall
,
it is clear that
big
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a big
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percent
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percentage
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of
tourists
were from Europe.
Moreover
,Europeans spent more time than others in
this
country. The interesting fact is that
,
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Asian and American
tourists
had similar interests.
Although
the highest percentage of
people
were from Europe, 37%,the
least
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lowest
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percentage of travellers were from Other places,10%. 35% of travellers came from America.
While
18% of comers were
asians
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Asians
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.
Tourists
from other regions stayed
about
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for about
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10
days
in Australia.
However
, Europeans stayed 6
days
more than them. Asians' average length of stay was 7
days
. But
american
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American
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people
stay 14
days
in
this
country.If
most
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the most
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popular place for
tourists
from Asia was
5-star
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a 5-star
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hotel,
americans
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Americans
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chose
4-star
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the 4-star
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hotel
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hotels
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.
Additionally
,Europeans and
people
who came from other countries stayed in camping or caravans.
Furthermore
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sightseeing was interesting
by
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for
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people
from Asia and the USA. Most of the
tourists
from the EU were keen on swimming and sunbathing.
People
from other places were interested in surfing.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words tourists, people, days with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • comparison
  • spike
  • drop
  • correlation
  • seasonal variation
  • demographics
  • tourist influx
  • resort
  • holidaymakers
  • visitor statistics
  • notable changes
  • fluctuation
  • steady growth
  • decline
  • peak season
  • off-peak season
  • international tourists
  • domestic tourists
  • external factors
  • economic conditions
  • political climate
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