Recent research suggests that the majority of criminals who are sent to prison commit crimes after they are released. 1. Why is this the case? What can be done solve this problem?
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challenge.
I would like to start with the fact that criminals who are in prison
are completely isolated from society because of this
the principles of these people
change greatly. Bad influence in prison
also
leads to the fact that people
forget what is normal and what is not because in a few years the way people
live changes greatly. When they live surroundeed
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people
with a criminal past.
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now
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is not done, there will be more and more recidivists. That is
why, it is necessary to allow them to work.
In conclusion, I would like to say that ban
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