The chart below shows the results of a survey of people who visited four types of tourist attraction in Britain in the year 1999. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the results of a survey of people who visited four types of tourist attraction in Britain in the year 1999.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie chart compares figures for
visitors
to four categories of tourist attraction and to five different
theme
parks in Britain in 1999.
It is clear that
theme
parks and museums / galleries were the two most popular types of tourist attraction in that year. Blackpool Pleasure Beach received by far the highest proportion of
visitors
in the
theme
park
sector. Looking at the information in more detail, we can see that 38% of the surveyed
visitors
went to a
theme
park
, and 37% of them went to a museum or gallery.
By contrast
, historic houses and monuments were visited by only 16% of the sample,
while
wildlife parks and zoos were the least popular of the four types of tourist
attraction
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, with only 9% of
visitors
. In the
theme
park
sector, almost half of the people surveyed (47%) had been to Blackpool Pleasure Beach. Alton Towers was the second most popular amusement
park
, with 17% of the sample, followed by Pleasureland in Southport, with 16%.
Finally
, Chessington World of Adventures and Legoland Windsor
had
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each welcomed 10% of the surveyed
visitors
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, theme, park with synonyms.

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