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The chart below shows information about changes in average house prices in five different cities between 1990 and 2002 compared with the average house prices in 1989.

The chart below shows information about changes in average house prices in five different cities between 1990 and 2002 compared with the average house prices in 1989.
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The bar chart illustrates the percentage change in average
house
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prices
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 in five cities—New York, Tokyo,
London
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,
Madrid
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, and Frankfurt—during two periods, 1990-1995 and 1996-2002, compared to the average
house
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prices
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 in 1989. In the period from 1990 to 1995, most cities experienced a drop in
house
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prices
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 compared to 1989. Tokyo and
London
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 saw the largest decreases, with
house
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prices
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 plummeting by around 7-10%. New York’s
prices
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also
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 dipped by about 5%.
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, both
Madrid
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 and Frankfurt showed a slight increase, with Frankfurt having the smallest rise of about 2%, and
Madrid
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's
prices
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 growing by nearly 1%. In the 1996-2002 period,
house
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prices
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 increased in most cities.
London
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 saw a dramatic surge with
prices
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 rising by nearly 12%. New York and
Madrid
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also
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 experienced modest increases of approximately 5% and 4%, respectively. Frankfurt remained relatively stable,
while
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 Tokyo was the only city to continue showing a downward trend with a
further
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 5% decrease in
prices
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. In summary,
house
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prices
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 generally recovered after 1996, with
London
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 experiencing the most significant growth.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words house, prices, london, madrid with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreases" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuation
  • suburb
  • metropolitan
  • trend
  • appreciation
  • depreciation
  • residential market
  • housing bubble
  • real estate
  • economic factors
  • urbanization
  • infrastructure development
  • property value
  • inflation-adjusted
  • comparative analysis
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