In some countries, it is becoming increasingly common for people to follow a vegetarian diet. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

In a number of countries, following a vegetarian
diet
has become very popular.
Although
being a vegetarian can limit the
options
when eating, I believe the advantages outweigh the disadvantages because it allows the body to work properly. For vegetarian
people
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it is difficult to find varied
options
to eat. Since the majority of the worldwide population
have
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a
diet
that includes animal
products
,
these
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type of
food
is the one
that is
normally available at
food
businesses.
Therefore
,
people
with a vegetarian
diet
have to choose between a limited number of plates or
products
when buying
food
or eating out.
For example
, in many popular restaurants in Colombia, the menu has only a short vegetarian section which includes only two or three plates that are completely vegetarian.
However
, I believe that those
options
that are offered are healthier than plates that are sold in large quantities. Following a vegetarian
diet
allows the body to work better.
This
is because science has shown that when our human system digests animal
products
,
such
as meat, it has to work harder to process the
food
that it is not designed to receive.
Thus
,
people
that
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have a
diet
based on plants and seeds are more prone to have a healthier life because they allow their bodies to focus their energy
in
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its
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normal processes.
For instance
,
people
who become vegetarian are less prone to get sick because their immune system has all the energy focused on fighting bacteria and not causing chronic inflammation because of the
food
.
That is
why I consider that following a vegetarian
diet
can have more benefits in the long term. In conclusion,
although
vegetarian
people
have fewer
options
when buying
products
without animal ingredients, it is my belief that following a vegetarian
diet
has a positive impact
in
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the
body
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functions.
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  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Vegetarian diet
  • Chronic diseases
  • Carbon footprint
  • Deforestation
  • Animal welfare
  • Nutritional deficiencies
  • Balanced intake
  • Societal norms
  • Meat-dominant
  • Sustainable living
  • Plant-based proteins
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