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The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart depicts how was the floor map of a state library set 20 years ago and how it is constructed now. A glance at the graph makes it clear that the Central Library witnessed a huge difference throughout the whole period in the question.
Main
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 upgrade is that tables and chairs were removed and self-service machines installed at the central east part. With regards to
west
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the western
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 part of the plan, 20 years ago at the top of the west side were CDs, videos, and computer games which made a way for children's fiction
books
 and two sofas were correctly placed.
Moreover
,
instead
 of the adult
fictions
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books
there
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there,
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 all reference
books
 are arranged now.
Further
, at the below of it,
reading
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the reading
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 room was transformed into the computer room. Turning to
east
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the east
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 part of the map, the area for children's
books
 turned into the lecture room.
In addition
, the space for non-fiction
books
rebuilt
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 into the spot for the fiction
books
,
also
 the information desk was installed and three self-service machines were set up. What is more, the enquire desk where people bought tickets,
book
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and book
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 returns gave way to the cafe.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words books with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "set" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • floor plan
  • public library
  • layout
  • reading area
  • computer station
  • multimedia section
  • children's area
  • reference section
  • study cubicles
  • shelving units
  • digital media
  • technological advancements
  • user behavior
  • accessibility
  • traffic flow
  • modernization
  • community needs
  • conversion
  • allocation
  • removal
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