The graphs below show the total percentage of films released and the total percentage of ticket sales in 1996 and 2006 in a country. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs below show the total percentage of films released and the total percentage of ticket sales in 1996 and 2006 in a country. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The two bar charts illustrate the total percentage of movies released and the proportion of
ticket
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tickets
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sold in 1996 and 2006 in a particular nation.
Overall
, it is apparent that
drama based
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movies were released in
highest
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percentage
on
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in
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both
years. Meanwhile, romantic films had
least
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and
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an
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equal percentage in
given
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period.
In contrast
, comedy pictures sold the highest fraction of tickets.
Initially
,
drama
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the drama
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was the most released movie in
both
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with about 27%
came
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out in 1996 and slightly
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to 35% in 2006.
Similarly
, 20% of comedy movies were released in 1996 and upsurged by 5% in the gap of 20 years to reach 25% in 2006.
However
, Romantic films had the matching numbers of release with approximately 7% in
both
1996 and 2006.
On the other hand
, comedy pictures
helds
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holds
held
the lofty portion of tickets sold with 20% in 1996 which grew nearer to 22% in 2006.
Likewise
, drama films
vended
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vented
nearly
similar
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a similar
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portion of tickets in
both
of the
year
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years
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.
However
, fantasy
movie
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movies
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doubled their ticket sold in 2006 to around 7% which was just about 3% in 1996.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words both with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • depict
  • significant increases/decreases
  • highlighting
  • drawing comparisons
  • discrepancies
  • notable trends
  • unexpected findings
  • anomalies
  • phenomenon
  • emphasizing
  • evolution
  • implications
  • producers
  • distributors
  • audiences
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