The map below shows two potential locations for a shopping mall in the city of Brandfield. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. A1

The map below shows two potential locations for a shopping mall in the city of

Brandfield.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make

comparisons where relevant. A1
The map shows two potential locations for a shopping mall in the city of Bradfield. The difference between
two
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the two
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sites is that S1 is near to the city centre
whereas
S2 is near to the countryside. But the sites
also
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are also
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access by road and railway. If we look at the information carefully. S1 is
also
close to the housing estate and there are golf
course
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courses
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and
park
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parks
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not far away from there which is more comfortable.
Also
near the S1
have
Verb problem
is
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a river. S2 is
also
close to the city centre and industrial estate but there is no river near there.
By
contrast
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contrast,
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S2 lies between road and railway but it would be difficult
to
Change preposition
for
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people from housing estate and
also
golf
Correct article usage
the golf
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course and park are far away from the site
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • shopping mall
  • city center
  • suburbs
  • accessibility
  • public transportation
  • congestion
  • local businesses
  • economic impact
  • environmental considerations
  • infrastructure
  • urban planning
  • development
  • consumer behavior
  • green spaces
  • residential area
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