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The chart below shows the amount of leisure time enjoyed by men and women of different employment status. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the amount of leisure time enjoyed by men and women of different employment status. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart depicts the distribution of free
time
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 based on gender and employment status in the years between 1998 and 1999. It can be seen that for all categories the
hours
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 of
leisure
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time
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 do not exceed 85
hours
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 and the minimum is 40
hours
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. The largest amount of
time
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that is
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 spent on
leisure
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time
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 belongs to males who are unemployed or retired (above 80
hours
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). Females who have the same situation, spend less
time
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 (about 78
hours
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) on
leisure
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time
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. Apart from retired and unemployed people, those who are employed full-
time
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 have the least amount of
time
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 to spend in their free
time
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. 50 and 38
hours
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 for employed men and women respectively. The plot does not provide any information about part-
time
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 employed men and those men who are doing house chores.
However
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, for women who are employed part-
time
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, the amount of
time
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 spent in
leisure
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time
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 is roughly the same as for full-
time
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 employees (a bit higher).
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Vocabulary: Replace the words time, hours, leisure with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "amount" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • leisure time
  • employment status
  • full-time employment
  • part-time employment
  • unemployed
  • retired
  • housewives
  • gender comparison
  • notable differences
  • allocate time
  • trend analysis
  • work-life balance
  • time management
  • societal norms
  • economic factors
  • gender-specific trends
  • employment transition
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