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your English-speaking friend has asked for your help with a college project he or she is doing about celebrating New Year in different countries. write a letter to your friend. in your letter, write a letter to your friend. in your letter : 1. say how important new year is to people in your country. 2. describe how new year is celebrated in your country. 3. explain what you like about New Year celebrations in your country.

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Dear Joey, I am writing
this
 letter to give an insight into the New
Year
’s celebration in my nation for your final project at Oxford University, England. People in my country have varied views on
revelling
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travelling
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 next
year
. Many opine that it is a significant event because it brings good fortune for them
whereas
 some assert it is a good way to thank the almighty for blessing one more
year
.
Thus
, every sect has
different
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 plan for it. As many have faith in religion, they relish worshipping God for the entire 31 December night.
Besides
, some individuals like to enjoy the
last
 night of the
year
while
 attending live concerts or dance parties and persons like me, like to visit hill stations to start the New
Year
 with the fresh air and positive energy.
Although
 everyone seems full of energy and happiness, the most commendable thing is the resolutions made by all for setting up the goals
along with
efforts
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 required to achieve them in the upcoming
year
.
Moreover
, I
also
 like the discounts and offers on travelling and shopping at that time. I hope the above-mentioned information will be helpful to you. I can’t wait to meet you soon. Yours loving friend, Jacob
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task achievement
Try to elaborate more on how different cultures within your country celebrate. This adds depth to the reader's understanding.
coherence cohesion
Ensure smooth transitions between paragraphs to enhance the logical flow.
greeting and closing
Your greeting and closing are warm and appropriate, which adds a friendly touch.
complete response
You have effectively covered all the points required by the prompt with relevant details.
single idea per paragraph
There's a clear structure in your paragraphs, with a single main idea per paragraph.
suitable writing tone
The tone of your letter is suitable for a friendly yet informative correspondence.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • significant
  • reflection
  • goals
  • loved ones
  • fireworks
  • gatherings
  • traditions
  • public events
  • religious ceremonies
  • festive atmosphere
  • reconnect
  • exchanging gifts
  • resolutions
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