The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.

The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
The bar chart describes a country’s earnings between 2015 to 2016, and the table shows the percentage change
about
Change preposition
in
show examples
exports in each part during 2015 and 2016.
Overall
, in 2016 compared with 2015 Engineered goods and
Textiles
all
have
Wrong verb form
had
show examples
a big
increase
, and
Textiles
has
Wrong verb form
had
show examples
the largest
increase
. Beside Petroleum
products
and Agricultural
products
also
have a
slightly
Change the adverb
slight
show examples
increase
.
However
, Grows and
jewelry
Change the spelling
jewellery
show examples
have
a
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
decrease
Wrong verb form
decreased
show examples
. The bar chart
show
Change the verb form
shows
show examples
that
Textiles
has
Correct subject-verb agreement
have
show examples
a huge
increase
, in 2015
Textiles
export earnings
is
Wrong verb form
were
show examples
approximately 25
billion
, but in 2016 it has
increase
Change the verb form
increased
show examples
to more than 30
billion
. It increases
percentage
Correct article usage
the percentage
show examples
in
values
is 15.24%. Engineered goods
also
have
increase
Correct article usage
an increase
show examples
, in 2015 export earnings
under
Add a missing verb
were under
show examples
60
billion
, in 2016 it
has
Verb problem
was
show examples
over 60
billion
, has
increase
Change the verb form
increased
show examples
for
Change preposition
by
show examples
8.5%. Petroleum
products
have a
slightly
Change the adverb
slight
show examples
increase
, its percentage change in
values
is about 3%,
in
Change preposition
apply
show examples
2015
it
Change the pronoun
its
show examples
exports
earing
Correct your spelling
earning
show examples
nearly 60
billion
and in 2016 it has
increase
Change the verb form
increased
show examples
nearly
Change preposition
by nearly
show examples
65
billion
.
Beside
Correct your spelling
Besides
show examples
Agriculture
products
just have change in
values
Fix the agreement mistake
value
show examples
about
Change preposition
by about
show examples
0.81%, and
earing
Verb problem
earned
show examples
about 30
billion
during
Change preposition
from
show examples
2015 to 2016.
However
, Gems and
jewelry
Change the spelling
jewellery
show examples
have a deep decrease, in 2015 it
about
Add a missing verb
was about
show examples
43
billion
, but in 2016 it
fall
Wrong verb form
fell
show examples
to nearly 40
billion
,
Correct word choice
and it
show examples
it
Correct pronoun usage
apply
show examples
has decrease
Wrong verb form
decreased
show examples
5.18
Change preposition
by 5.18
show examples
% in
values
Fix the agreement mistake
value
show examples
.
Submitted by fiasngs on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words textiles, increase, products, billion, values with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 10 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • export value
  • trend analysis
  • anomalies
  • percentage change
  • sector analysis
  • global demand
  • domestic production
  • economic conditions
  • technological advancements
  • international regulations
  • economic growth
  • trade relations
What to do next:
Look at other essays: