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The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.

The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
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The bar chart and table chart illustrate the how much
exports
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export
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 earnings in different categories and the percentage change in values between 2015 and 2016.
Overall
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, the highest earning over the period was
petroleum
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products
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,
whereas
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 Textiles
was
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 the lowest export earnings. There were four product categories an showing in increase income between 2015 and 2016, which respectively were
Petroleum
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products
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, Engineered goods, Agricultural
products
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 and Texiles, except for Gems and jewellery which decreased.
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 the percentage change in values, textiles increased faster than others and agricultural
products
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 were the slowest.
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, gems and jewellery values decreased. Agricultural
products
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 earned over 43
billion
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 in 2015, which dropped to almost 40
billion
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 in 2016, falling 5. 18%. Textiles with a 15. 24% increase, from over 25
billion
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 in 2015 to 32
billion
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 in 2016. Both
Petroleum
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products
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, Engineering goods and Agricultural
products
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 were respectively with a 3%, 8. 5%and 0. 81% increase. The number of
petroleum
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products
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 grew
3
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billion
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 between 2015 and 2016.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words petroleum, products, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • export value
  • trend analysis
  • anomalies
  • percentage change
  • sector analysis
  • global demand
  • domestic production
  • economic conditions
  • technological advancements
  • international regulations
  • economic growth
  • trade relations
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