The diagram below shows the recycling process of aluminum cans. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevent.

The diagram below shows the recycling process of aluminum cans. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevent.
The diagram illustrates the processes involved in recycling
aluminiums
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aluminium
sheets of aluminium
plates of aluminium
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cans. The description
focus
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on
explanation
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an explanation
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of these processes. In general, these processes follow a series of stages from collecting, cleaning, sorting, shredding, compressing, heating, melting, rolling, recycling, and reusing. In the first stage, recycling aluminium cans begins with collecting
of
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the used
can
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cans
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. After that, they are cleaned, sorted, shredded, and compressed in the first machine.
Following
this
, the material is
coinceid
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conceived
coincide
heated and melted in another machine. Once the material has reached melting, it will be
roolled
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rolled
to be a
rool
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roll
with
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thick
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is 2,5mm - 6 mm.
Finally
, it will be
recyled
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recycled
and it has to be a reformed can.
This
can
will
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be reused and it
reach
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reached
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74% of usage in the United Kingdom.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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