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The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The two-floor plan of the public library illustrates how much it has changed over the
last
 two decades. There have been several developments in the layout over these years, and rearrangements have been made compared to the first diagram. The most notable change is, that 20 years ago the library had a
section
 for CDs, videos, and computer games
at
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on
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 the northwest side of the institution, next to the
adult
fiction
books
, but it can be clearly seen that the electronic
section
 has been converted into a hangout spot that contains two pieces of sofas facing each other at the opposite side of the room. The area
also
 has a selection of children's
fiction
books
, that originally
was
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were
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at
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on
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 the northeast side of the building.
While
 the entrance remained the same , we cannot say the same thing for the enquiry desk, as the second diagram shows, it has been replaced by a Café. In front of the
Café
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Café,
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 it is seen to have three self-service machines, an information desk and a
section
 for
adult
fiction
books
.
Instead
 of separating the
Adult
fiction
books
 and
Adult
 non-
fiction
books
 as they used to, today they have replaced the
adult
fiction
section
 with all reference
books
. It is obvious there have been quite a few changes after 20 years,
that
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which
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 the diagram
also
 shows.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words section, adult, fiction, books with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • floor plan
  • public library
  • layout
  • reading area
  • computer station
  • multimedia section
  • children's area
  • reference section
  • study cubicles
  • shelving units
  • digital media
  • technological advancements
  • user behavior
  • accessibility
  • traffic flow
  • modernization
  • community needs
  • conversion
  • allocation
  • removal
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