The bar chart below shows the sector contributions to India's gross domestic product from 1960 to 2000.

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The bar chart illustrates the percentage of contributions of three sectors-Agriculture, Industry, and Service, to India’s gross domestic product over a 40-year period. Looking at

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structure, it is readily apparent that in the beginning, Agriculture made the highest contribution compared to the other sectors,

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, by the end of the timeframe Agriculture was surpassed by the Services

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, the Industry

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maintained moderate indications throughout all periods. In 1960, Agriculture played a major role in India’s GDP contributing over 60%,

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, it experienced a significant decline of about 50% over the next 40

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, ending with approximately 12% by the end of the period. The opposite is true for the Services

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. It started with low indications of about 16% in 1960 but witnessed a sharp increase of nearly 50%, especially in the

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, ending with around 63% in the ultimate

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. The Industry

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displayed a markedly different pattern compared to the other two sectors. It played a less significant role in India’s GDP at the beginning, showing a slight increase from 15% to over 25% between 1960-1980,

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observed stability over the next 20

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The bar chart below shows the sector contributions to India's gross domestic product from 1960 to 2000.

At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

“By definition, charity is generosity in offering money, food, and help to the needy. To some people, such kindness should be boundless, others argue for a limit to it.” Which opinion do you support? In about 300 words, present your arguments.

Advances in health and biology and other areas of society in the last 100 years have transformed the way we live as well as postponing the day we die. There is no better time to be alive than now. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Doctors recommend that older people should get regular exercise. However many older people do not take enough exercise. What could be the reason for this? What can be done to encourage them to take exercise?