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The bar chart below shows the sector contributions to India's gross domestic product from 1960 to 2000.

The bar chart below shows the sector contributions to India's gross domestic product from 1960 to 2000.
The given graph illustrates the difference of growth in three various fields that contributed to India’s gross domestic product in a
40
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year
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 period.
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, it is obvious that industry and
services
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 underwent strong increases over the period with the exception of agriculture. In the preliminary
year
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 agriculture showed the highest indication, but in the ultimate
year
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 reverse position with
services
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. Looking at the details, the percentage of agricultural output was equal to 63% in 1960 which was the highest at the
begging
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 of the
year
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.
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 decreased to 45% in 1970 and
this
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 drop continued end of the period. In 2000 reached approximately 15% which was the least favorable production section. Regarding
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industry and
services
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 contribution, in 1960, roughly were similar, but
then
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 experienced a tiny rise until 1980 and after the number of
services
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 witnessed
significant
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 extension in 1990 comprised to 45% and
this
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 rise continued, in 2000,
standed
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stood
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 at over
the
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apply
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60%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words year, services with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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