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The plans below show the site of an airport now and how it will look after redevelopment next year.Latest Topics

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The two maps illustrate the main transformations which will
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 place in the Southwest Airport in the following year. In general, it appears that the Southwest Airport will become much more modern after its redevelopment, with more services and shopping One interesting change is that the
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 will be knocked down to build a new sky train.
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 present, there
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 any shops for passengers, but an area for shopping will be built past the security. Another striking change is that the
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 module will be moved to make
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room
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bag drop service which will be on the
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 of the departures.
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 the
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 module will be reintroduced at the area that used to be
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. If we look at the arrivals, a completely new
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 next year. two additional doors are planned. By the entrance of the arrivals, a new
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 and car hire service will be constructed. It shows that two
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additional doors are planned to be added at the entrance. A final remarkable development will be the expansion of gates to 18.
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task response
To achieve a higher score, ensure to include all the points and details from the maps. Try to be more specific and descriptive about the changes rather than being general. For example, you could detail how many shops there will be or the precise layout changes.
coherence and cohesion
Improve coherence by making sure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence and that sentences within paragraphs are well-connected. Use linking words such as 'furthermore', 'moreover', and 'in addition' to make your points more cohesive.
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The essay provides a clear overview of the changes and what they signify for the airport's development.
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The response clearly mentions the significant changes both in the departure and arrivals area which shows a comprehensive understanding of the plans.

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