Some people think that higher institutions should concentration more on academic subjects such as history and the physical sciences, while others think that they should concentrate more on practical subjects such as car mechanics and cookery, and so on. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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People have different points of view about which topics higher institutions should concentrate on.
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some people believe that schools should emphasise academic
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as history and the physical sciences, I believe that it is best to concentrate on courses like mechanics or cookery. Some people believe it is better to focus on history and physical sciences because they think that can improve individuals' economic
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, higher institutions emphasise these
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which can improve their scores so they can access universities and employment positions.
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, one friend of mine obtained good scores in high school and that permitted him to study chemistry guided him to a great job, enhancing his economic
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. Even though institutes think that focusing on academic
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can improve the economic
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, I strongly believe that higher institutions should focus on practical
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because can improve their problem-solving skills.
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, focusing on practical topics can help you to thrive in life,
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resourceful.
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, when I moved from my parents' home I had to do the chores, shopping, cooking and more, living in my own apartment.
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, my parents did not teach me any of these responsibilities.
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, the university taught me how to manage everything including cooking in a cookery class. I could solve everything myself having an open mind and finding the solution I needed.
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institutes believe that focusing on academic topics will improve individuals' economic
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, I personally believe that practical
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can enhance problem-solving skills
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Ensure a clear thesis statement in the introduction to outline your position effectively.
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Expand on how practical subjects directly benefit problem-solving skills with more detailed examples.
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Review grammar and vocabulary to maintain high coherence and clarity.
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Effectively presented both views before providing a personal opinion.
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The example about moving out and managing chores is relatable and well-explained.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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