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These days, fooddays, food travels long distances before reaching consumers, and it is therefore believed that consuming locally grown food would bring about a number of economic and environmental benefits. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages ?

#fooddays #food #distances #consumers
In
this
comtemporary
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contemporary
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planet
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 there is a disagreement around the topic of fresh
food
 grown inside the nation and
food
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 from outside the country. Some people assert that
food
 should
grow
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 locally and it will bring numerous benefits to
the
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human life. In
this
 essay,I will discuss the pros and cons of
locally grown
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locally-grown
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 meals. To
embark
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 with, there are numerous benefits of local produce foods. first and foremost, nowadays, seven out
ten
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 folks are suffering from health-related diseases. One of the vast
concern
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 about
this
 problem is
growing
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the growing
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 demand
of all seasons
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for all-season
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food
. All season foods cannot be grown in one particular area;
therefore
 individuals depend on outside country meals which take longer to come. To increase their life many types of chemicals
used
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.
As a result
, these
chemical
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chemicals
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effects
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human life in different ways.
For instance
, a recent survey conducted by Time
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 of India indicates that the demand
of
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 unseasonal
food
is
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increased in India by 12% in 2019 as
campared
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compared
 to 2011.
While
on the other hand
,
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introduction conclusion missing
Consider finishing the essay with a conclusion to summarize the points discussed.
logical structure
Try to use more transition words to enhance the logical flow between sentences and paragraphs.
relevant specific examples
Include more specific examples to clearly illustrate the advantages and disadvantages of locally grown food.
task response accomplished
The essay addresses the task by discussing both advantages and disadvantages of locally grown food.
introduction effective
There is a clear statement introducing the topic and indicating the intention to discuss pros and cons.
relevant examples used
The essay raises a relevant point about the use of chemicals in food preservation, connecting it to health issues, supported by a relevant statistic.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Carbon footprint
  • Greenhouse gas emissions
  • Fuel consumption
  • Local economy
  • Local farmers
  • Boosts
  • Fresher produce
  • Nutritious
  • Transit
  • Seasonal eating
  • Varied diet
  • Balanced diet
  • Preserve
  • Farmland
  • Green spaces
  • Limited variety
  • Monotonous diet
  • Higher costs
  • Imported food
  • Smaller-scale production
  • Reduced economies of scale
  • Climate constraints
  • Year-round
  • Shortages
  • Natural disasters
  • Weather conditions
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