What are the advantages and disadvantages of spending a holiday in your own country compared to traveling abroad? Discuss both perspectives and provide your opinion on whether staying local or traveling internationally is more beneficial.

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Nowadays, there are many
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to travel their local or international
site
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seeing at their
lerisure
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leisure
time.
This
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essay will
dissuess
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discuss
the
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both
perspetives
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perspectives
of
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travel
in your own country and visit other destinations abroad.
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my
own
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opinion,
two
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the two
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types of travelling are both important and have
positive
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a positive
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impact on my life. More
undersatang
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understanding
of the local culture is the benefit
for
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of
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visiting the local
site
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. Every
singal
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single
country must have their own heritage and history for exploring. In
the
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modern society, many working
adult
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adults
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are
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very busy
on
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dealing with
their
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pressure and no more
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hoilday
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holiday
.
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, spending a
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hoilday
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holiday
in your own city can let them
to
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feel
relax
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relaxed
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in
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on
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the short
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hoilday
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holiday
.
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: more and more travel
agency
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agencies
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hold
the
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local
tour
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tours
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for visiting the countryside of Hong Kong,
many
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and many
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local people are willing to join,
it
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which
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can show
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shows
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the popularity of the local tour.
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disadvantage, people may feel crowded when they visit
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local
attraction
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attractions
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especially
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in Hong Kong. Hong Kong is
the
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a
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high-density city, many international tourists come
to
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there for shopping or
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site seeing
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sightseeing
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.
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the horizon is the main advantage
for
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of
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travelling abroad. People can enjoy the different
culture
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cultures
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or
tradition
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traditions
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including foods, music, and arts of other countries. Visiting the museum or
hesitage
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heritage
site
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, you can know more about the history or mindset of
particular
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a particular
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citiy
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city
.
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:
visiting
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the
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a
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traditional temple in
japen
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Japan
,
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tourists feel calm and relaxed because the temple
have
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has
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many traditional
story
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stories
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and
history
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histories
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. Huge
expediture
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expenditure
must be the disadvantage of
vitising
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visiting
vitalising
other counties. Air tickets and
accmmodation
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accommodation
fee
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fees
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are expensive and not to
affort
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afford
effort
easily. When visiting abroad, the tourists always are willing to pay for special culinary or
souvenoir
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souvenir
souvenirs
.
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, many
finanical
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financial
plan
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plans
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must be arranged. I think that visiting the local or international are both have advantages and disadvantages. It
depend
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depends
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on how long your vacation
and
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is and
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your
finanical
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financial
situation. If you only have
2
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a 2
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-3 day
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hoilday
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holiday
,
travel
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travelling to
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local
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the local
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area is a suitable choice.
On the other hand
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, if you have a long
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hoilday
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holiday
and enough
finanical
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financial
budget,
travalling
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travelling
abroad must be
a
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wonderful for exploring different
culture
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cultures
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in other countries.
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Focus on ensuring the logical flow and clarity of your ideas. Connect the ideas more seamlessly to improve readability and coherence.
task achievement
Ensure you provide a balanced discussion of both perspectives to fully address the task requirements. Ensure ideas are clearly comprehensive and relevant to the topic.
coherence cohesion
The essay presents a clear introduction and conclusion, providing a framework for your ideas.
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You have included examples to support your points, which adds depth to the discussion.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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