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The table below shows the results of a survey of first-year students taking various courses at a particular university. It shows how many students considered various aspects of their courses "very good".

The table below shows the results of a survey of first-year students taking various courses at a particular university. It shows how many students considered various aspects of their courses "very good".
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The table chart compares data about freshmen
students
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,who study
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several courses,mainly
Economics
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,
Law
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 and
Commerce
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 and important aspects
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 their study in one university.
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,
it is clear that
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students
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 in
Commerce
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 studied better than others.
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, all
students
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 were good at Tutor support.
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 people in
Economics
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 got 55% in Pre-course information,
Law
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 and
Commerce
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students
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 had 72% and 95% in Teaching quality
students
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 in
Economics
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 and
Commerce
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 had similar percents, 95%. The
law
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 course had only 67%.
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, Commencement had 93% in Tutor support.
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,
Economics
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 got 92% and lawyers had 79% respectively.
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, 59%
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students
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 in
Economics
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 were good at Recourses print.
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,
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 70% gotten by
Law
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students
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 and 81% had by
Commerce
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students
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. Another interesting thing is that in other recourses if 62% of
students
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 in
economics
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 were good,
students
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 in
Commerce
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 got 86%. And 80% gotten by
law
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students
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.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, economics, law, commerce with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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