The bar chart shows the percentage of adult male smokers in seven countries along with the world average in 2000 and 2015.

The bar chart shows the percentage of adult male smokers in seven countries along with the world average in 2000 and 2015.
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The bar chart shows the information
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adult male
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, broken down into seven different countries
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the world average in 2000 and 2015, indicated in percentages.
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, it can be clearly observed that Egypt and Lebanon experienced an upward trend,
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that of the remaining five nations
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the world underwent a declined rate.
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, it is interesting to note that Australian male
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accounted for the lowest statistics among these nations in both comparing years.
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with, in 2000, at approximately 66%, Armenia had the highest number of male
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among others, followed by Bangladesh and Cuba at slightly above 60% and 50%, respectively.
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these three aforementioned countries outnumbered that of the average global
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, at about 42%, the other three nations: Egypt, Lebanon, and Mexico, shared similar percentages at 35%.
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, Australia was only just under 30%, at 28%. Five years later, in 2015, a closer look at the bar chart
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that the trend shifted a little, where both Cubanian and Armenian
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were the greatest at roughly 52%. surprisingly, Australia's remained stable at its
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rank, at 18%.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bar chart
  • percentage
  • adult male smokers
  • world average
  • time frame
  • notable differences
  • trends
  • reductions
  • increases
  • smoking rates
  • global smoking trends
  • insights
  • summarize
  • overall trends
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