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The graph shows the number of visitors to a variety of art galleries in 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and repo fling the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows the number of visitors to a variety of art galleries in 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and repo fling the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph
are showing
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shows
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time visiting
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visits
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 to see
variety
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 of art galleries in 2011.
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Louvre
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the Louvre
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 france art gallerie are high visitor as
compare
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 to
metropolitan
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the metropolitan
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museum
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museums
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 USA on the other side bristish gallerie are slightly increase
national
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museum
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 of
korea
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 are same as
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the museo
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museo
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Museo
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prado
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Prado
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 but
state
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russia
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are
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little
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 low. As We can
louvre france gallerie
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Louvre France Gallerie
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are
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 8.9 million visitors but when we check the
metropoliton
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 USA
are
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just 60 lakh visitors
but
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when we check out
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the british
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british
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museum
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 there viewer is near to Metropoliton.
National
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The national
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museum
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Museum
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 of
korea
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Korea
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 are low number of
viewer
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viewers
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 as
compare
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compared
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 to
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the british
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british
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British
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 it's just 3.1M but when we check carefully museo del prado spain is 3M on the other-hand stage hermitage Russia
are
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 just 2.9
Customer
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Customers
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Add more linking words.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words museum with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • visitor numbers
  • fluctuations
  • peak season
  • off-peak season
  • trend
  • visitor demographics
  • attendance
  • special exhibition
  • promotional campaign
  • footfall
  • gallery capacity
  • cultural attraction
  • art enthusiasts
  • exhibit
  • statistical comparison
  • tourist attraction
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