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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. It is observed that in many countries not enough students are choosing to study science as a subject. What are the causes? And what will be the effects on society? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

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The tabular chart represents the differences of people who went abroad for visiting purposes in four different
years
.
Overall
, it is clearly apparent that the
number
 of visitors was in increasing trend.
Similarly
, Europe had the highest
number
 of travellers during all periods.
In contrast
, the Middle East welcomed the least
number
 of tourists.
Initially
, the
number
 of visitors in Europe increased dramatically over 15
years
 reaching 400.2
million
 travellers in 2005 which was previously 280.2
million
 in 1990.
However
, the
number
 decreased in America by 5
million
 in the
last
 five
years
 reaching 113.2
million
 in 2005 from 118.2
million
 in 2000.
On the other hand
, the
number
 of tourists in Asia grew to approximately 20
million
 people in every five
years
.
Additionally
, the
number
 of visitors in Africa was slightly expanding where 28.7
million
 guests were carried.
Conversely
, the Middle East had the least
number
 of explorers among five different areas serving just 15.8
million
 tourists in 2005.
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task response
Try to provide a more comprehensive response by including all the key points mentioned in the task prompt, detailing the causes behind the lack of students opting for science.
task response
Use clear and comprehensive examples or evidence to support your ideas, as this will increase your clarity of thought.
coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph focuses on a single main idea, and develop it with logical reasoning and supported examples.
coherence cohesion
Include a stronger introduction and conclusion that clearly present and summarize your main points.
coherence cohesion
The essay includes a logical structure and generally maintains a clear direction. There is a noticeable attempt to sequence information and ideas logically, with an overall flow from general observations to specific details.
task response
The essay presents observations and attempts to provide evidence through data, which strengthens the argument about different regions and their trends in tourism.

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