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The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items on five different countries in 2002.

The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items on five different countries in 2002.
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The table show's percentage of
consumer
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 expenditure for three categories of products and
survives
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survived
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 in five different countries in 2002
Overall
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, the largest proportion of
consumer
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 spending in each country went on food, drinks and tobacco,
whereas
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 the leisure/education category has the lowest percentages in the table. Looking
to
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at
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 the details, the highest number of food/drinks and tobacco was 31.14% in Turkey,
while
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 the lowest one was 15.77% in Sweden.
Consumer
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 spending
28.91
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was 28.91
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% in Ireland,
whereas
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 in Spain it was 18.80%.
Moreover
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, in Italy proportion of food/drinks and tobacco category was just 16.36%. In
clothing
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the clothing
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 and footwear section Ireland and Turkey
has
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 kinda similar percentages ( 6.43% and 6.63%).
Consumer
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 lavishing in clothing and footwear
9.00
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was 9.00
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% in Italy, at the same time it was 6.51% and 5.40% in Spain and Sweden. Leisure/education has the lowest proportion in Spain ( 1.98%). Italy and Sweden
has
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 the same number ( 3.20% and 3.22%). Whilst,
digit
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a digit
the digit
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 in Ireland was 2.21%.
Although
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 only 4.35% was
spending
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spent
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 by
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consumer
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consumers
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 in Turkey.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words consumer with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumer spending
  • items
  • countries
  • comparison
  • overview
  • table
  • data
  • information
  • proportion
  • percentage
  • figures
  • categories
  • expenditure
  • purchases
  • spending habits
  • trends
  • average
  • highest
  • lowest
  • variation
  • pattern
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