The charts below show three types of police reports from the city of Johnstown in 2016, along with Johnstown’s average monthly temperature. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The charts below show three types of police reports from the city of Johnstown in 2016, along with Johnstown’s average monthly temperature.  

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.
The
subjected
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report
disclouse
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discloses
more about the three types of police reports in the city of Johnstown of the
year
2016.
Firstly
, there
is
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three kinds of reports mentioned in the chart between January
up
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apply
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to December, the first one is
Theift
report
, Noise Complaints and
Traffic
Violations. As
it
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apply
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shown
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, in January the percentage of
Theift
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Theft
report
is 20%, Noise Complaints less than 20% and the
Traffic
reached up to 180%. Moving to the Second Quarter of the
year
we can see that there is an
increasment
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increase
increased
increasing
of
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the
Theift
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Theft
report
and Noise, but less in
Traffic
.
Second
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,
third
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and third
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part of the
year
shows big
diffrences
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differences
difference
in the number of
theift
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theft
report
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reports
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as it went up to 140% with
decrease
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the decrease
a decrease
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of
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in
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the
Traffic
to
be
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apply
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150%,
Last
quarter of the
year
the
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the the
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theift
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theft
reduce
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reduced
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to 80% and the
Traffic
ranked 160%. In conclusion, 2016
year
shows that the highest
report
was
Traffic
Violations
comparing
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compared
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to others.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words report, year, theift, traffic with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • data representation
  • crime rate
  • monthly variations
  • correlation
  • theft
  • vandalism
  • assault
  • seasonal trends
  • temperature fluctuations
  • peak
  • decline
  • law enforcement
  • civil disorder
  • statistical analysis
  • public safety
  • climatic influence
  • incidence rate
  • aggregate data
  • preventative measures
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