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The map below shows two potential locations for a shopping mall in the city of Brandfield. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. AE

The map below shows two potential locations for a shopping mall in the city of Brandfield. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. AE
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The illustration gives information
for
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 two eventual locations for
planned
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the planned
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 shopping mall in the
city
 of Brandfield.
Overall
, it is clearly shown that one of the potential sites
of
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for
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 a shopping mall is in the
City
Centre
.
According to
 the map, the road surrounded the
City
Centre
. And it is
conveniently
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 for constructing. There are housing estates which
includes
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 the north side.
Industrial
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The industrial
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 area is close to
City
Centre
. In the middle of the
City
centre
located
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is
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 the river. There are main roads from
north- east
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the northeast
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 to
south
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the south
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 side of the map. The
city
centre
 is close to the Industrial area which may offer employment opportunities and
also
easy to transfer
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easy-to-transfer
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 services.
Additionally
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,
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there are places
such
 as restaurants, banks,
cafes
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and cafes
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 near the
centre
 and it is convenient for people.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words city, centre with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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