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The line graph shows TV news viewing figures over a one-year period. Write a report of at least 150 words summarizing the main features and making comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows TV news viewing figures over a one-year period. Write a report of at least 150 words summarizing the main features and making comparisons where relevant.
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The charts
depicts
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distribution
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the distribution
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 of
time
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where
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when
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people
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watches
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watch
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TV
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 within one year.
Overall
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Te
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The
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number
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 of
people
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 watching
TV
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 witnessed
fluctuatuation
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fluctuation
 at three category stream
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time
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times
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 with most
people
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 consider to watch at 6
pm
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. On the other side, there are
stready
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already
steady
 in the amount of viewers at 1
pm
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.
TV
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 is being watched by
people
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at
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apply
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before midnight is in
fluctuate
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fluctuating
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 trends. In the evening, which is 6
pm
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,
people
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 enjoy
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tv
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the tv
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 programme the most, despite its decreasing
number
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 over the year.
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, residents experience different
habit
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habits
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 of
seeing
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watching
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tv
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TV
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 at 9.30
pm
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 and 11
pm
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. At half past nine, with its
noticable
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noticeable
 high start points, witnessed steady trends before
reach
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 its lowest screen
time
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on
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in
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 August
then
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 rocketed back to
the
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a
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 considerable
number
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 which is around three
millions
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million
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 views.
In contrast
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 to
earlier
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the earlier
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time
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frame
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frames
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,
people
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 first are less
in
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apply
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favorable
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favourable
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 in
to do
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doing
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 so
at
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apply
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before midnight ,
however
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 reach
its
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their
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 peak point at the same
time
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 as the previous one.
Different
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A different
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 dynamic is seen by the
number
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 of
people
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 watching at 1
pm
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. After midnight,
little
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a small
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 amount of
people
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 prefer to do
this
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 activity. The
number
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 is consistent throughout the year around 1,5 million per day.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words time, people, tv, number, pm with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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