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The line graph below shows the number of serious crimes that occurred in London between 2003 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below shows the number of serious crimes that occurred in London between 2003 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given line graph illustrates the number of
henious
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heinous
 crimes that happened in London from 2003 to 2012.
Overall
, it is clear from the bar graph that armed robbery was the most happening crime in London, which experienced
dramatic
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a dramatic
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 decrease throughout the period.
Assult
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Assault
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 increased steadily throughout the period and murder experienced steadiness. From 2003 to 2004, the number of armed robbery
crime
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crimes
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 shows a slight increase from 3500 to 3600.
Then
 it shows a dramatic decrease until 2008.
Moreover
,
assult
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assault
 depicts a steady increase from 2003 to 2012. 2400
assults
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assaults
 happened in 2003, and it increased up to 2800 in 2012.
In addition
, in 2003, 500 murders
happend
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happened
happen
 and it showed a slight increase in 2005, which is 900.
Then
 it started decreasing and in 2008 it again showed 500. In 2010, 700 murders happened. Murders remained almost steady
in
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apply
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between 2011 and 2012.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatic" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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