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Some people think that robots are very important to human's future development, while others think that they are dangerous and have negative effects on society. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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There are opposing views about
robots
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 some
people
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 believe that
robotics
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 will play an integral in the future, others argue that it has an adverse bearing on society. Both of the aforementioned perspectives will be discussed in the following paragraphs with the reasons behind
this
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. On the one hand, some
people
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 believe that the proliferation of
robotics
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 engineering will have far-reaching effects on every aspect of life.
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 the fact that
robotics
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technology
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 has the ability to drive economic productivity. Automated machines and processes are set up to operate consistently and accurately without needing to rest.
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, since its inception, the quality of human life has improved with a host of means to help
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 daily boring tasks like household chores.
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, robot cleaners and bionic limbs help
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reduce manual work and usher in an era of
technology
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On the other hand
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, some
people
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 still have a widespread concern about the threat of
robots
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. The underlying rationale behind
this
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 is that
robotics
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technology
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 will increase
unemployment
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 rate. A host of labour-intensive tasks will be replaced by
robots
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such
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 as drivers, workers, and even doctors.
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, the doomsday scenario will become a reality when machines will outsmart their creators.
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, every citizen will become
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 of machines if we are too dependent and passive on
technology
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. In conclusion, the benefits of
robots
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 are undeniable.
Although
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 it has certain risks for society, its contributions to human progress are enormous and remarkable.

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task achievement
Avoid generalizations without specific examples or evidence to support them.
coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph logically flows to the next, perhaps by using more linking phrases or sentences.
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Both viewpoints on robots are thoroughly discussed, showing understanding and awareness.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion with a coherent structure.
coherence cohesion
The language used is clear, making the ideas easy to understand.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • automation
  • precision
  • efficiency
  • production outputs
  • cost savings
  • innovation
  • medical outcomes
  • human error
  • exploration
  • hazardous environments
  • unemployment
  • economic disparity
  • ethical concerns
  • privacy
  • security
  • misuse
  • dependency
  • overreliance
  • social isolation
  • manual labor
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