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Band 4.5

You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Modern communications mean that it’s no longer necessary to write letters. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

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Some say that nowadays writing
letters
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 is obsolete
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the existence
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 of modern means of communication. I agree with
this
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 statement as the latter is more convenient and available in every far-flung part of the
world
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. Up-to-date information delivery services overcome old-fashioned paper communication
in convenience
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inconvenience
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, as they are faster and easier to use. It takes a lot of time for the letter to be delivered to its destination, in some cases it might take months.
In
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contrary
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, a phone call or a message if the internet is available on both sides,
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,
is connecting
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 both sides of the conversation instantly.
Letters
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 are
also
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 harder to send as they require a properly signed address,
then
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 the sender has to go to
post
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the post
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 office and pay for a delivery service and there is no guarantee it will reach the recipient. Modern communications lack these complicated processes and only require a device with a connection to a
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world wide
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worldwide
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 network. Another reason why I think
letters
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 are being replaced with new communication methods is the latter often functions where
letters
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 cannot be delivered. The modern
world
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 offers full coverage of the planet, which is used for information exchange.
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, there are internet cables connecting every piece of land together and where it
was
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 impossible to place a wire, satellites are used to transfer messages.
Letters
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 are
bounded
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 to post
offices
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offices'
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 functioning ranges and don’t offer the same wide coverage. In conclusion, I agree that modern communications push away written
letters
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 as they support instant connection between parties of the conversation
as well
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as
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 they are simpler to utilize.
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, they are
also
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 ubiquitous, connecting every part of the
world
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.

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Coherence and Cohesion
Your essay is well-organized with clear paragraphs that address the prompt effectively. However, consider using more transitional phrases to improve flow between your ideas.
Task Achievement
Provide more real-world examples to strengthen your arguments, such as specific technologies or personal experiences with communication methods.
Task Achievement
The essay consistently maintains a formal tone and clearly addresses the prompt, effectively stating your viewpoint.
Coherence and Cohesion
Each paragraph has a clear central idea and supports your viewpoint effectively.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • modern communication
  • traditional letter writing
  • personal touch
  • emotional value
  • formal writing
  • speed and efficiency
  • instant messaging
  • societal norms
  • job applications
  • heartfelt messages
  • adaptation
  • changing communication landscape
  • contemporary methods
  • nostalgia
  • digital correspondence
  • written expression
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