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Reading comics only rot the children's mind than to provide any good education. How far you agree/disagree with this?

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Some say comical books are a
way
 of ruining a child's mind rather than providing knowledge.
This
 essay will disagree with
this
 notion because of the creative and engaging
way
 in which they can teach values and have a
long term
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 impact.
Comics
 provide a creative
way
 in which values like empathy, love, evilness, morals and loyalty can be taught to
children
, apart from sharpening their skills in the field of sarcasm and
humor
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. Not only
this
, every comic always has a moral towards the end which teaches a child about the repercussions of their
behavorial
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behavioural
 aspects. These are some of the skills that cannot be taught effectively via the conservative education route. Archies,
for example
, is one the most popular
comics
 of the time, where a lot of these values are showcased in terms of characters, giving an enjoyable yet
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very powerful educational journey for the
children
.
Furthermore
,
comics
 have a pictorial and engaging
way
 of educating which can help remember facts for a longer time. All of the science fiction novels or
comics
, engage you with interesting stories or facts, imparting an impactful and engrossing experience. The Big Bang Theory,
for example
, is inspired
from
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comics
, that teach
children
 about the universe and its origin and is famously popular among all the science geeks.
To conclude
,
children
 should be allowed to read
comics
 on appropriate topics
otherwise
 they would miss out on a creative and long-lasting experience to learn.
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