Some people believe that teenagers should be required to do community work during their free time. This will benefit both teenager and community. Do you agree or disagree with the statement?

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Nowadays, some
people
are struggling to overcome the issues in society and they are thinking that youngsters
to be
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should
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participated
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participate
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in
the
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apply
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community
works
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work
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during their leisure time. I strongly believe that
the
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teenager helps
to
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the
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apply
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society
would be
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more
benefits
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benefit
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to
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them and
also
for
community
. On
one
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the one
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hand, youngsters are the right person for to develop the
community
.
For instance
, they can improve the civilization systems, engineering, socialism,
patriotism
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and patriotism
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.
Moreover
, they can upgrade the technologies like networking, telecommunications and industries. So they have the ability to do
the
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community
work and they will have the benefits and
also
they can able to study very easily for the requirements to achieve a goal
On the other hand
, teenagers should
involve
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be involved
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in
the
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social services like helping poor
community
people
.
For example
,
while
helping
to
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the poverty
people
they can
stable
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be stable
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in their
life style
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lifestyle
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.
Additionally
, they can grow by doing help.
And they
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They
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can
also
develop the knowledge and skills and
implemented
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implement
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them to
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to
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in
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the
community
people
for their development
purpose
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purposes
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.
While
teaching someone, they can understand the
situations
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situation
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clearly and communicate
to
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with
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each other
To conclude
that
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apply
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teenagers should
be
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have
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more benefits
while
helping
to
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apply
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the
community
and
also
they can
be learning
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learn
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so many good things from among
this
and
also
they can guide a person to develop
the
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skills and management and
also
to be honest they can develop others very easily,
then
they can easily survive to the correct ways of conditions of life being good things
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Your essay presents a clear perspective on the benefits of teenagers contributing to community work for both the teenagers and the community.
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