Some people think that countries should limit the amount of food that they import and mainly eat products from their own country. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In recent times many
countries
has
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been depending on
import
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importing
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and
export
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exporting
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goods
. It is a highly debatable issue whether
countries
should avoid the amount of
food
tha
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that
they
import
, or whether they mainly eat products from their own
country
. I totally agree that it is useful to
import
goods
from other
countries
.
This
essay will outline the importance of importing foods and not only mainly depending on our
country
's
food
. Importing
goods
play
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a vital role in
the
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employment. There will be a wide range of factories that require a large number of workers and employees.
For example
, my
auncle
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uncle
works in
international
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an international
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factor which is famous
of
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buing
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buying
being
various types of
vegatable
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vegetable
vegetables
from different
countries
. So,
this
may help
people
to find
opprtunities
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opportunities
for
job
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.
Moreover
, engaging in
import
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importing
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goods
,
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potentially can lead to
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a varity
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varity
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variety
of
food
.
People
have many choices in choosing the best product.
For instance
, if you go to the the Lulu hypermarket , there will be many international
fruit
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fruits
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which are from different
country
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countries
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like India or America.
Thus
,
poeple
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people
will enjoy eating from
diffrernt
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different
country
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countries
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.
In addition
,
import
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importing
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products usually
strenghening
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strengthening
social relationships. It encourages
coopreation
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cooperation
and social interaction between individuals and communities. A good example here is the
reslut
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result
of conducted
reseach
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research
at Glasgow University illustrates that the movement of trade between the
countries
increased dramatically to 90%.
As a result
,
this
could
helps
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to build
a good relationships
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a good relationship
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between
people
and communities.
Furthermore
, the economy of the
country
contribute
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to
climb
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the climb
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in our
country
. A lot of
people
like to buy
from
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new and fresh
import's
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import
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food
. To illustrate,
people
prefer to go shopping where there are
huge
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a huge
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number of
goods
. In conclusion,
import
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imported
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foods are helpful for
people
. I agree that it is
essntial
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essential
for both
countries
and individuals to buy from other
countries
.
However
, the government should
stoppe
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stop
the
iead
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idea
of limiting the
amount
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of
import
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imported
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products.
Therefore
,
people
should be
encourge
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encouraged
encourage
to work hard and trade for
best
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the best
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product.
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task achievement
Ensure all parts of the task are fully addressed and developed with relevant ideas and examples. You mentioned important points about employment and the economy, but the essay could benefit from more balance by also discussing potential drawbacks or the perspective of those who disagree.
coherence cohesion
Improve the logical structure by clearly presenting and organizing main ideas. Some ideas could be better linked and expanded upon. For example, the connection between variety of foods and enjoying different cultures could be more clearly stated.
coherence cohesion
Provide a more comprehensive conclusion that summarises all main points with a clear final opinion or recommendation.
task achievement
You offer clear and relevant examples which support your main points, like the example of your uncle working in the import business.
coherence cohesion
Your introduction clearly presents your opinion and outlines the points to be discussed.
coherence cohesion
The essay discusses multiple perspectives, such as the roles of employment and social relationships in importation.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • domestically produced food
  • agricultural sector
  • carbon footprint
  • greenhouse gas emissions
  • food security
  • global market fluctuations
  • trade disputes
  • local food production
  • dietary variety
  • international trade relations
  • retaliation
  • exports
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