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Some people believe that robots will play an important in future societies, while others are that robots might have negative effects on society. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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There is a belief that
robots
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 might reach an important stand in future
conmmunities
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communities
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 others
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 that these machines may lead to several disadvantages. In my point of view, I agree that
robots
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 can bring plenty of negative impacts. On the one hand, there are tons of benefits
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 these bots. First of all,
robots
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 can take
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 for heavy
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such
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 as
:
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 working on
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construction sites site and exploring outer space.
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, it
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 extremely dangerous for
human
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humans
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 when
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 the galaxy but now
siencetists
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scientists
 are able to send
robots
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 to replace conventional astronauts.
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the production productivity will be optimized by using electrical machines .
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because
 bots do not need to relax
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 normal workers do.
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,
robots
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 are able to work
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 the maximum time.
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 from Samsung pointed out that
robots
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 can make a product 5 times quicker than traditional workers.
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, these man-made things
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also
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 bring some negative effects on the mass. It can be seen in
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reality that today there are different types of
robot
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robots
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 are aim to serve people's
demand
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. As a
reprecussion
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repercussion
, if individuals depend too much on
robots
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 in the long term,
human
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humans
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 may
lost
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 primordial instincts
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 as walking and cooking.
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,
ultilizing
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utilising
robots
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 in the industry may lead to
lack
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 of
job
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jobs
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 so the rate of unemployment will be escalated.
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, the nation's economy and residents' living
standard
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standards
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 may be affected badly. In conclusion,
while
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robots
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 create many benefits for
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society, the drawbacks are needed to caution. In my opinion ,the
authority
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 ought to conduct
robot
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robots
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 in various aspects
in
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 a controlled level to
detiorate
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deteriorate
decorate
 the dangerous impact on the community.
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coherence
Articulate the main ideas more clearly to enhance understanding, especially in the introductory and concluding paragraphs.
language
Be mindful of grammatical errors and typos, such as "conmmunities," "siencetists," "reprecussion," and "detiorate." Review the text thoroughly to improve language accuracy.
task response
Expand the discussion on specific examples and illustrate points more comprehensively to support your arguments effectively.
task response
The essay introduces both sides of the argument about robots' influence on society, indicating a balanced view.
coherence
There is a clear introduction and conclusion, which helps guide the reader through the essay.
task response
Examples, such as the use of robots in space exploration and industry, are relevant and add value to the arguments.
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