Some people believe that advertisements aimed at children should be banned. Others argue that advertisements have a positive impact on children. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Advertisements have been an influential part of the human life cycle, especially in the
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, these works of marketing often raise a debate on whether they should target
children
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in their campaigns or not. The article below will explore the positives and negatives of having minors as the target audience for advertisement campaigns. Commercials aimed at
children
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hold the potential
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unreal and irrational expectations of the young ones. These marketing campaigns frequently highlight unreal details that can create a fallacy in the viewer's mind.
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, a product like
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phone which might have detrimental effects on a child's health is shown being used by
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the younger
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generation.
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, for juveniles, the content should be censored appropriately as they are very sensitive to what they see. To highlight an instance, Balenciaga was in the news for portraying infants with adult products. A contrasting view presented by the researchers
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supports the idea of commercials making a constructive impact on
children
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as they mirror the real-world scenarios. These promotions can seed new thoughts for
children
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helping them build a better perspective towards society. A study revealed, that
children
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who were exposed to advertisements were more social and outgoing.
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, ads
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help
children
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think out of the box helping them hone their intellectual abilities.
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the topic sparks controversy and is debatable, considering the rationales discussed above, I believe that advertisements should not target
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directly.
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Provide more specific examples to strengthen the argument, especially when discussing the impact of advertisements on children's social behavior.
coherence cohesion
Ensure clear transitions between paragraphs to improve the overall flow of the essay.
task achievement
The essay addresses both sides of the argument, showing a balanced view.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are clearly presented, providing a comprehensive view of the issue.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumerism
  • materialism
  • impressionable
  • manipulative
  • discern
  • navigate choices
  • informed consumers
  • potentially beneficial
  • health consequences
  • creative development
  • imaginative play
  • economic impact
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