Many people work long hours, leaving very little time for leisure activities. Does this situation have more advantages or more disadvantages?

At present, numerous individuals consider that hard

working

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has priority over enough

resting

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.

Theretore

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Therefore

,

this

essay will examine a few reasons for each matter in

this

assertion.

Firstly

the main reason that strong working is beneficial for improving people is effort for future.

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being expensive all necessary goods in life the employee have to try more and more until they can get

adequate

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an adequate

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salary for dealing

live

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life

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. Adding that

price

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the price

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of rents is the most important subject.

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the researchers have indicated that

majority

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of the

workers

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worker's

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salary

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salaries are

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spend

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according

of

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to

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the

rents

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and there is no

any

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money end of month,

hence

, they have to work hard and try

to able

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to afford their expenses.

On the other hand

, always the

time

of work depends on

the

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life expenses and

this

is

best

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the best

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reason for hard activity in

the

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apply

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all

of

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careers. Adding that,

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money

is playing as

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a main

roll

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role

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in

this

matter and

this

is unreliable for

worker

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workers

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or employees.

Although

, it is said that the

time

of leisure may bring a few plus points.

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recently an international newspaper published news that 71% of

the

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folks have stress

because

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lack of enough resting. Nowadays, people are working

hot

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only for morality, but

also

for their peace.

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their

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need adequate

time

for refreshing and recovery and

this

can not be disregarded as well.

To conclude

, undoubtedly hard

working

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in long hours can provide positive things

Thus

I assume that every public is improving their way of

time

working currently and

try

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trying

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to create

balance

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a balance

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between working

time

and rest

time

for leisure activity