The chart and graph below give information about participants who have entered the Olympics since it began. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar and line graphs illustrate data about the Olympics, specifically focusing on the
number
and gender of participants
.
Overall
, the number
of athletes has shown a positive trend, with a majority being male.
As depicted in the illustration, the first Olympics took place in 1924, featuring approximately three thousand participants
. Most of these were men
, with nearly one hundred women
.
After 28 years, the number
of participants
increased to 5,000. Although
the number
of women
had risen, the majority remained male, with almost 4,500 men
.
The charts indicate that the number
of participants
had
doubled since the beginning. By the 1984 Olympics, there were approximately 7,000 Wrong verb form
has
participants
, with a gender ratio of nearly 1 to 3—5,000 men
and 1,500 women
, respectively.
The final year represented in the data is 2012. At this
time, the number
of women
surged to nearly 5,000, marking the best result for female participation. Men
numbered only 1,000, bringing the total to 11,000 athletes.Submitted by bizhanalikhan6 on
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