The table below give information about the amount of beer and fruit juice consumed per person per year in different countries. write at least 150 words.

The table below give information about the amount of beer and fruit juice consumed per person per year in different countries. write at least 150 words.
The graph depicts states' ranking regarding demand
of
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fruit juice and beer per individual.
Overall
there are
tree
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three
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categories of consumption rank, which is some
countries
spotted both and either one included in
this
top 10. The first type
are
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countries
that concluded to both. Germany, Austria, The United Kingdom, Australia, Finland, and The United States were on
this
classification. Germany and Austria consistently in second to
forth
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fourth
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position. On the other side, The United Kingdom and The United States concluded at 6th and 8th, excluding
2nd
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position of
latter
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the latter
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country regarding fruit juice. Australia
that
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ranked
in
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7th and 6th respectively. Finland
exactly
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at 10th and 7th.
Then
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last
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noticable
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noticeable
pattern can be seen in
Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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which was both in
9th
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the 9th
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. The
last
type
are
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countries
with
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joining the table at merely one commodity.
This
assesment
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assessment
concluded for
countries
such
as Ireland, Belgium, Denmark, New Zealand, Canada, and Sweden.
The
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former three
countries
, its people were categorized in
top
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the top
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10 in regards
of
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to
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beer.
Then
the rest of them enjoyed fruit juice even more if compared to other
countries
around the world.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

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