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the chart and graph below give information about sales and share prices for coca-cola.write a report for a university lecturer describing the information show below.

the chart and graph below give information about sales and share prices for coca-cola.write a report for a university lecturer describing the information show below.
#information #sales #prices #coca-cola #report #university #lecturer #show
The pie chart shows
information
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the information
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the
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about the
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refions
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regions
 which buy more
Coca-Cola
. The graph shows
total
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the total
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 sales of
Coca-Cola
 in different regions.
Overall
 it can be seen that
Coca-Cola
 is more popular in
the
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apply
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America
 than
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in onother
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onother
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other
region
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regions
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. On the whole
middle east
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Middle East
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buy
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buys
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 less
Coca-Cola
that
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than
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 Asia and Europe. And the
price
 of
Coca-Cola
 rose in 1998 to 85$. In terms of
seles
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sales
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Coca-Cola
 in Asia in almost half of
sales
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the sales
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 in
America
.
While
 Twice as
Asias
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Asian
 people buy
Coca-Cola
than
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in
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 Africa and
Middle
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the Middle
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 East. North
America
 is not quite as sales
Coca- Cola
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Coca-Cola
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 as Latin
America
. Coca-Colas
Price
rise
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 slightly between 1996 to 1997.
Price
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The price
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 of
coca-cola
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Coca-Cola
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 in 2000 was nowhere near as expensive as
1998
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in 1998
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. And the
price
 of that fluctuated between 1998 to 2000. And was
rise
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rose
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 slightly in 3 years between 1996 to 1997.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coca-cola, america, price with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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