Nowadays, experience is more valued in the workplace than knowledge in many countries. Do you think the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

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will draw a conclusion. Let us begin by examining the benefits. One significant advantage of giving priority
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task achievement
Ensure that the essay covers both sides of the topic. Currently, the essay only introduces the benefits of experience but doesn't explore the potential disadvantages. Expand on the disadvantages to provide a more complete response.
coherence cohesion
The logical flow of the essay needs improvement. Make sure to establish a clear structure in each paragraph, guiding the reader smoothly from one point to the next.
task achievement
Strengthen your arguments by providing specific examples or evidence from your knowledge or experience, as currently examples are lacking.
coherence cohesion
Clarify the introduction by clearly stating your stance on whether the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.
coherence cohesion
The essay starts with a relevant introduction, setting the context for the discussion.
coherence cohesion
There is an effort to break down the issue into benefits and disadvantages, which is a good approach for structure.
task achievement
The topic of workplace experience versus knowledge is understood and addressed.

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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • valued
  • workplace
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • experience
  • knowledge
  • mentor
  • colleagues
  • innovation
  • stagnation
  • traditional methods
  • recent graduates
  • theoretical knowledge
  • diversity
  • viewpoints
  • proven ability
  • stability
  • industries
  • technology
  • adaptation
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