Countries around the world will be facing significant challenges related not only to the environment, but pollution and education as well. What problems your country will face in next years.

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many countries will be facing important problems related to many situations including the environment, pollution and education. I expect my country will face a problem in studying at home for
children
. The main reason
of
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this
is that the house has many distractions and a viable solution is to add more classes in
school
. When
children
back from
school
and start learning the lessons they take
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in
school
they face many things
distract
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that distract
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them from learning.
Firstly
, technology has a significant impact on
children
's learning.
For instance
, my little brother always takes his iPad and starts playing with his
school
friend until the evening.
Secondly
, family issues impact
children
's mental health making them can not focus or not have anybody to teach them the lessons.
For example
, the employees do not have time to take care of their
children
. When it comes to the solutions to
this
problem first of all. I recommended that
school
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schools
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add classes
at the end
of the day, these classes offer teachers
help
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students write their assignments, teach students what they find
it
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apply
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hard to understand, improve their skills in
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listening
, writing and reading and
finally
learn
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them how to depend
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themselves. One
school
in another country
did
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this
decision and the
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are showing
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a great differences
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between
student
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students
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.
To sum up
, one of the expected things
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become
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at
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in
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future
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is
the
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decrease
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level of
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students
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because of technology and
families problem
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family problems
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and we can solve it before it becomes popular by making schools
place
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a place
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to do all the
education
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things.
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Coherence and Cohesion
Try to enhance the logical flow between your ideas, particularly when transitioning from problem description to solutions.
Task Achievement
Expand on examples and provide more context to strengthen your points. For instance, give specific examples of other distractions kids face beyond technology.
Task Achievement
Elaborate on your solutions by discussing potential challenges and how they might be overcome.
Task Achievement
You’ve clearly stated the problem and offered a viable solution.
Coherence and Cohesion
The introduction clearly lists the main problems your country might face, setting a clear focus for the essay.
Coherence and Cohesion
The conclusion effectively summarizes the essay's main points, reinforcing your opinion.

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