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Most people pay taxes to contribute to the development of their country, however, some think they have other responsibilities rather than paying taxes. Discuss both view and give your opinion.

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It is argued that most
people
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 pay
taxes
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 to contribute to their
country
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's
development
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while
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 others believe that the public
have
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 other responsibilities
besides
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 paying
taxes
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. Even though
taxes
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 are one of the key elements of public
income
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 which
are spend
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are spent
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 for
development
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, I agree with the latter idea because
people
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also
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 need to contribute their capabilities to develop their state by supervising the
government
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. Most of
national
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the national
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 budget comes from
the
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taxpayer money,
due to
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 the fact that most
development
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 projects rely on public spending,
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taxes
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and taxes
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 are crucial for
development
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.
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, when they are required to pay
significant
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a significant
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 amount of
taxes
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, they feel that they
are already contribute
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are already contributing
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 significantly to the public.
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, research found that the level of
development
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 in
countries
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 with
high
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high-income
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income
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taxes
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are
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is
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 generally higher than the
countries
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 with
low
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low-income
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income
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taxes
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.
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, a high number of tax
income
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 is only able to develop a
country
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 if the
government
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could
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can
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 use it properly. Without a competent and credible
government
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, the public could not experience proper
development
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 projects properly.
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, it is
also
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 the public's responsibility to make sure their
government
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 are spending their money wisely for
development
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.
That is
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 to say, it is crucial for the
people
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 to have the capacity to supervise and critique their
government
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 in order to achieve the expected level of
development
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.
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, a lot of research found that
countries
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 with high levels of
development
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 tend to
also
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 have high levels of public participation and civic engagement compared to
countries
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 with lower levels of
development
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.
To conclude
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,
while
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 many
people
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 believe that by paying
taxes
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 they already contribute to their
country
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's
development
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, I believe that they
also
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 need to supervise and participate in different kinds of civic engagement in order to make sure their
government
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 develop their
country
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 properly with their tax money.

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task achievement
Ensure that each paragraph explicitly addresses the different aspects of the question. For example, in the paragraph discussing the importance of taxes, but also incorporate more examples or scenarios to illustrate this point clearly.
coherence cohesion
Work on improving the transitions between points and paragraphs to enhance the flow of the essay. Each paragraph should naturally lead to the next one.
introduction conclusion present
The essay contains a clear introduction and conclusion that encapsulates the key arguments effectively.
task achievement
The essay offers a comprehensive discussion of both viewpoints, showcasing a balanced and nuanced understanding of the topic.
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