Most people pay taxes to contribute to the development of their country, however, some think they have other responsibilities rather than paying taxes. Discuss both view and give your opinion.

It is argued that most
people
pay
taxes
to contribute to their
country
's
development
while
others believe that the public
have
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other responsibilities
besides
paying
taxes
. Even though
taxes
are one of the key elements of public
income
which
are spend
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are spent
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for
development
, I agree with the latter idea because
people
also
need to contribute their capabilities to develop their state by supervising the
government
. Most of
national
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budget comes from
the
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taxpayer money,
due to
the fact that most
development
projects rely on public spending,
taxes
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and taxes
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are crucial for
development
.
Moreover
, when they are required to pay
significant
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a significant
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amount of
taxes
, they feel that they
are already contribute
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are already contributing
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significantly to the public.
For example
, research found that the level of
development
in
countries
with
high
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high-income
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income
taxes
are
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is
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generally higher than the
countries
with
low
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low-income
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income
taxes
.
However
, a high number of tax
income
is only able to develop a
country
if the
government
could
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use it properly. Without a competent and credible
government
, the public could not experience proper
development
projects properly.
Therefore
, it is
also
the public's responsibility to make sure their
government
are spending their money wisely for
development
.
That is
to say, it is crucial for the
people
to have the capacity to supervise and critique their
government
in order to achieve the expected level of
development
.
For instance
, a lot of research found that
countries
with high levels of
development
tend to
also
have high levels of public participation and civic engagement compared to
countries
with lower levels of
development
.
To conclude
,
while
many
people
believe that by paying
taxes
they already contribute to their
country
's
development
, I believe that they
also
need to supervise and participate in different kinds of civic engagement in order to make sure their
government
develop their
country
properly with their tax money.
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task achievement
Ensure that each paragraph explicitly addresses the different aspects of the question. For example, in the paragraph discussing the importance of taxes, but also incorporate more examples or scenarios to illustrate this point clearly.
coherence cohesion
Work on improving the transitions between points and paragraphs to enhance the flow of the essay. Each paragraph should naturally lead to the next one.
introduction conclusion present
The essay contains a clear introduction and conclusion that encapsulates the key arguments effectively.
task achievement
The essay offers a comprehensive discussion of both viewpoints, showcasing a balanced and nuanced understanding of the topic.

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