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Solar energy is becoming more and more popular as a source of household energy in many countries around the world Why is this? What are the advantages and disadvantages of solar energy? Give reason for your answers and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

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Nowadays, natural resources
really
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 important. Solar
energys
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energy
 has
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several beneficial sides. First of
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 we aren'
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 pay
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 for
energy
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. İ
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's really because
people
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has
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 difficulty
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 financial freedom. As a global starting to
use
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everywhere
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.
I
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really happy
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mostly using solar
energy
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 because ı don'
t
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 pay so much pay or my
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 never
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.
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t
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's like invisibility for government tax.
People
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use
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 that technology because they
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know how
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use
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 way it's better for
energy
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.
Government
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 probably doesn'
t
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 like that. Solar
energy
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 resources for
world
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the world
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 and for exist really good initial especially. We need to benefit
wealth
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the wealth
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 of
sun
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the sun
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.
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 incredible
succeed
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for
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in
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 sustainable
energy
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 recently specifically
about
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this
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 innovation. I'
m
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 proud of
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the experts
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Likewise
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 we need
a
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more innovation. I hope in the short time experts find new properties for
in
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the future society. Solar
energy
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 disadvantages definitely I think it is a really unnecessary big. Some
people
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 unfortunately
doesn'
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t
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 find to place for solar
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system
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. That's why they are renting
new
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 garage or something like that. İ
t
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's really unusual for
our
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. But as ı said it's
big
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 project for humanity.
People
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doesn'
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t
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worried
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 about electric interruptions no longer because they are using
solar
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the solar
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system
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systems
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. I understand
people
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, because
recent
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in recent
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 years I bought
one
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solar
energy
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 and ı realized what is difference
firstly
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 ı
don'
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t
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 concerned about any electrical
problem
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problems
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 because we don'
t
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 have a problem
solar
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with solar
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energy
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system
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systems
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very
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 successful. I'
m
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 enjoying it so ı don'
t
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 have any problem.
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Finally
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 advise
to
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apply
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your friends
for
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use
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 to
solar
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the solar
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system
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systems
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 because it's new technology and the best. I'
m
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 sure they will really love
to
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this
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 innovation. Simultaneously solar
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system
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systems
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useful
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are useful
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 for weather conditions. Don'
t
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do
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concern
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,just buy it. I'
m
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 saying from my own experiences.

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coherence cohesion
Improve the logical structure by organizing your points clearly. Consider creating distinct paragraphs for introduction, advantages, disadvantages, and conclusion. This will enhance clarity and flow.
coherence cohesion
Ensure all ideas are expressed clearly. Simplify sentence structures and avoid unnecessary repetition to make your points more understandable.
task achievement
While you address the parts of the prompt, provide more detailed explanations and examples to strengthen your argument. This will help in delivering a complete response.
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Introduce more specific examples to illustrate your points. Sharing personal experiences is great, but aim for more diversity in examples such as global perspectives or statistical data.
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The essay displays enthusiasm and personal experience, which makes it engaging. Your positive outlook on solar energy shines through.
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You have clearly addressed both advantages and disadvantages of solar energy, showing an understanding of both sides of the topic.
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The language used is expressive, and there is an evident attempt to persuade the reader, which adds personality to your writing.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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