The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given flow chart illustrates the
manufacture
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process for making
sugar
from
sugar
cane.
Overall
, there are seven steps
of
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the process
to transform
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of transforming
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sugar
canes
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cane
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into
sugar
. In terms of producing
sugar
,
a the
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the
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sugar
canes, which are the main ingredients, were
growth
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first for 12 - 18 months. It
then
can be harvested in two ways, manually by people and by a machine. After that, the
sugar
canes
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cane
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then
put into a crushing machine in order to be transformed into
a
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juice. To purify the juice, it has to
put
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into
limestone
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filter and heated by
evaporator
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an evaporator
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machine to
then
become a syrup. In order to take the
sugar
crystals
that
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contained in the syrup, it requires a centrifugal process.
Finally
, after being separated from the syrup,  
sugar
crystals have to be dried and cooled to be
sugar
.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
Vocabulary: Replace the words sugar with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • manufacturing process
  • sugar cane
  • harvesting
  • transporting
  • factory
  • crushing
  • extracting
  • juice
  • filtering
  • impurities
  • heating
  • evaporating
  • syrup
  • boiling
  • crystallizing
  • sugar
  • separating
  • drying
  • packaging
  • distribution
  • stage
  • process
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