The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use.
The given pie charts illustrate how
energy
is used for different purposes in an average Australain
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Australian
household
,
and the average Remove the comma
apply
greenshouse
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greenhouse
emissions
in an Australian household
result from energy
use
.
Overall
, it is clear from the first pie chart that the majority of energy
are
used for heating, and the lowest amount of Change the verb form
is
energy
is used for cooling in an Australian household
. The second pie chart shows that water heating is the primary cause
of greenhouse
gas emissions
, and the most minor cause
of greenhouse
gas emissions
is cooling.
Australians use
around 42% and 30% of energy
respectively to heat up their houses and water . Moreover
, they use
around 15% of energy
for other appliances. The lowest amount of energy
they use
for lighting and cooling which are 4% and 2% respectively.
In an Australian household
, the primary cause
of greenhouse
emissions
is water heating, which is 32%. Other appliences
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appliances
casue
28% of Correct your spelling
cause
greenhouse
emissions
. Moreover
, cooling and lighting cause
3% and 8% of greenhouse
emissions
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