The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use.
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is used for different purposes in an average Use synonyms
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,
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greenhouse
emissions
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result from Use synonyms
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.
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, it is clear from the first pie chart that the majority of Linking Words
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used for heating, and the lowest amount of Change the verb form
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energy
is used for cooling in an Australian Use synonyms
household
. The second pie chart shows that water heating is the primary Use synonyms
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emissions
, and the most minor Use synonyms
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around 42% and 30% of Use synonyms
energy
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around 15% of Use synonyms
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for lighting and cooling which are 4% and 2% respectively.
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greenhouse
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emissions
is water heating, which is 32%. Other Use synonyms
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28% of Correct your spelling
cause
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emissions
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