It is generally agreed that society benefits from the work of its members. Compare the contributions of artists to society with the contributions of scientists to society. Which type of contribution do you think is valued more by your society?

It is argued that the betterment of

the

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society

is in the hands of its inhabitants.

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the

role

of

scientists

and

artists

in

the

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society

, their

valued

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in the community has

also

been questioned by many people. In my

opinion

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both

contribution

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is

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are

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important and are valued in

the

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society

. I agree with the ideas and will support my opinion in

this

essay. Generally, it is said that no

society

can flourish without the people in it. So,

participation

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the participation

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of

individual

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individuals

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is necessary for the growth of the community.

Besides

volunteer work, hand-in-hand help with the government or

contribution

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the contribution

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of

scientists

and

artists

in the community can make

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the surrounding

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surrounding

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a better place to live.

Moreover

,

Scientists

and

Artists

are the more prominent

figure

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figures

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in

this

regard. The scientific

development

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developments

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in daily life (invention of different machinery for daily use like washing

machine

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machines

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, rice

cooker

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cookers

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,

microwave

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microwaves

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etc) have made life easier.

Additionally

,

advancement

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advancements

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in the defence department (missiles, tanks, bombs

and

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guns etc) have secured the nations.

Furthermore

, it is

also

said that no creation is possible without

an

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artists

an artist

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artists

. Even in designing

of

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scientific things

role

of an artist is valued. They have

mad

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made

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society

beautiful and colourful, whether in the form of painting, sketching or spreading colours in the streets. Commencing to the

last

part of the argument,

Scientists

were given more value in the past, but now people are more

claver

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clavers

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and they know that

artists

are

also

equally important. As both of them have

equal

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role

in the

society

. If

scientists

through developments and inventions can make things advance and easier,

then

artists

are the one who makes the

life

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lives

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of inhabitants colourful and

meaning ful

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meaningful

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.

Hence

, it is proven from the above argument, that the growth of the colony is in the hands of residents. Just like

scientists

,

artists

are

also

valuable because both

role

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roles

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in the

sorrounding

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surroundings

is

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are

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equally necessary.