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The pie charts show the electricity generated in Germany and France from all sources and renewable in the year 2009.

The pie charts show the electricity generated in Germany and France from all sources and renewable in the year 2009.
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The pie charts compare the
sources
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 percentage of
electricity
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genarated
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generated
 between in Germany and
France
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 in 2009.
Overall
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, Hydroelectric and Nuclear
genarated
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generated
generate
 the highest percentages of
electricity
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,
while
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 the percentage of
electricity
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genarated
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generated
from
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by
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other
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others
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 was
lowest
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the lowest
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 in the given
year
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. In terms of
electricity
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, the percentage of
German
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electricity
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 increased from
France
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electricity
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 renewable source of Hydroelectric, from 17.7℅ to 80.5℅ in the
year
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of
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apply
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2009. In the same years, In
France
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, Nuclear was increased
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by
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76.0℅ which was
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the hightest
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hightest
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highest
 from
German
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 in the given
year
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.
Similarly
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, Convention Thermal was
hightest
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highest
 in Germany, which
was
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apply
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decreased in
France
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, increased from 59.6℅ to 10.3℅. For the remaining
sources
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, In
German
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, Renewable
sources
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Biomass
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of Biomass
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 increased from
France
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, from 39.3℅ to 8.1% in the
year
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 2009.
On the other hand
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, Renewable
sources
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 of solar And Geoth.
was
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were
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 the only
sources
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 which decreased in
France
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 from
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German
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Germany
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 in the
year
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of
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apply
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2009
to
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apply
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. And in Germany
source
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the source
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 of wind was
high
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higher
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from
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than in
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France
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, from 6.1% to 0.0% And 0.0% to 0.0℅ respectively

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Vocabulary: Replace the words sources, electricity, france, year, german with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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